On the Verge of Tears
Wu Guanzhong
那年，我坐夜車去朝拜圣地——到茂陵瞻仰霍去病墓前的雕刻。
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Years ago ,I went by night train to Mao Ling ,a sacred place in Shaanxi Province,to pay homage to the sculptures standing before Huo Qubing's tomb.
要點：
1，題目雖然是《哭》但根據(jù)文章內(nèi)容，題目更確切的意思應(yīng)為“快要流淚”，或“幾乎流淚”，因此譯為On the Verge of Tears
2，“那年”即“有一年”或“幾年前”，譯為that year會造成讀者困擾，因為that 通常指前面提到過的事物，現(xiàn)譯Years ago
綜述：題目的翻譯看似簡單，其實是建立在對于全文的理解上。
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夜車到了終點站，霍去病墓還老遠(yuǎn)。在那滿天星斗的西北草原上，我時而順著大車道，時而踏著羊腸小徑往前趕路，及至霍去病墓地，天色才開始曙明。附近沒有行 人,我迫不及待的撲向墓前那幾座龐然巨物的偉大雕刻作品。我十分激動，它們永遠(yuǎn)是活著的，并一直是我精神上的支柱。當(dāng)我在異國遭到歧視的時候，當(dāng)世界上其 他國家的杰出藝術(shù)品令我敬仰的時候，我自餒的時候，痛苦的時候……這幾座氣勢磅礴的永恒的石頭雕刻便總會呈現(xiàn)在我的眼前。
As it was a long way from the terminal station to Huo's tomb,I had to hurry on with my journey on foot under the starry sky of Northwest China,sometimes on along a broad road,sometimes on a narrow footpath.The day was just dawning when I arrived at Huo's tomb.Not a pedestrian in sight.I lost no time in presenting myself before the majestic carved works of great magnitude before the tomb ,I was beside myself with agitation .The immortal art treasures will be my permanent spiritual prop.Whenever I am discriminated against in a foreign country ,whenever I stand in awe before a foreign outstanding work of art ,whenever I?am disheartened,whenever I suffer agony … these imperishable stone carvings of amazing grandeur will inevitably appear in my minds eye.
要點：
1，“夜車到了終點站，霍去病墓還老遠(yuǎn)?！弊g為As it was a long way from the terminal station to Huo's tomb，以as串句簡潔流暢，如果用when the night train arrived at its terminal station, Huo’s tomb still a long way off…則不如第一種譯法通順
2，“我…往前趕路”譯為I had to hurry on with my journey，to hurry on with 意為“匆忙做某事”如：He promised to hurry on with the report and send it to us today.? (他答應(yīng)趕緊寫好報告,今天就給我們送來.)
3,“附近沒有行人”譯為Not a pedestrian in sight,其中省略了was，不知道有多少童鞋想譯成there be……
4，“我迫不及待地?fù)湎颉弊g為I lost no time in presenting myself before… 其中“迫不及待”還可譯為hurriedly ,“撲向”即“奔向”，還可譯為came up to…
5,“它們永遠(yuǎn)是活著的，并一直是我精神上的支柱”譯為The immortal art treasures will be my permanent spiritual prop,其中art treasure 是譯者后加的，屬于增添詞，為的是滿足造句的需要
綜述：本段在簡化句子結(jié)構(gòu)和增加流暢性上有很多出彩的表達(dá)，比如Not a pedestrian in sight…和借用增譯詞來引導(dǎo)句子，值得我們借鑒。
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我久久徘徊于霍墓雕刻間，遠(yuǎn)看，渾然一體；近看，耐人尋味，在粗獷的斧鑿中行走著蜿蜒的線。斯是頑石，卻生意盎然，全世界的藝術(shù)家到此不能不肅然起敬！“我們的祖先比你強的多！”我也許是繼承了阿Q精神勝利的一面吧，但有了這樣矗立在世界藝術(shù)史上的祖先爺爺，確實得天獨厚。這總是值得欣慰的！
I loitered for quite a long while among the sculptures, which were an integrated mass when viewed from afar and very intriguing when scrutinized?lose by. Traceable among the rough marks of hatchet and chisel were delicate lines zigzagging .Insensate as they were, the carved stones were brimming with life and vigor, Artists from all over the world cannot help feeling awed when they visit this place."Our forefathers did much better than you!" I declared ?,maybe affected by Ah Q's philosphy of "spiritual victory". We are indeed very lucky to have our forefathers standing tall and upright in the world history of art. This is certainly a matter for rejoicing.
要點：
1，“在粗獷的斧鑿中行走著蜿蜒的線”即“蜿蜒的線條行走于粗獷的斧鑿痕跡中” 譯為Traceable among the rough marks of hatchet and chisel were delicate lines zigzagging .譯者采用倒裝句，更加突出“線條”的主語地位
2，“都不能不”譯為“都禁不住要…”譯為can not help doing
3,“我也許是繼承了阿Q精神勝利的一面吧”即“我也許是受了阿Q‘精神勝利法’的影響”譯為maybe affected by Ah Q's philosphy of "spiritual victory". philosophy作“人生哲學(xué)”“觀點”解，外國讀者可能不理解什么是“阿Q精神”此處要稍微解釋一下
綜述：四字詞值得積累。
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1989年我重返巴黎，感慨萬千。返回后，我懷著一種極其復(fù)雜的心情又一次去老了西安，再一次瞻仰霍墓雕刻。在霍去病墓前，在秦俑坑前，在碑林博物館的漢唐石雕前，我只想嚎啕痛哭。老伴跟隨我，還有那么多觀眾，我不敢哭?？奘裁?？哭它太偉大了，哭老鷹的后代不會變成麻雀吧？
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In 1989,While revisiting Paris ,I felt all sorts of emotion surging up within me, Back in China, when I paid another visited to Xi'an and the sculptures before Huo's tomb,I was seized with mixed feelings, I just felt like crying with?abandon as I stand once more before Huo's tomb, before the Chin Dynasty terra cotta warriors and horses and before the Han Tang Upright stone tablets bearing ancient inscriptions .But I refrained from tears because I was then accompanied by my wife and surrounded by numerous spectators. Why did I feel like having a good cry？Because my motherland is so great and because of my fears about the descendants of the eagles turning out to be sparrows.
要點：
1，“我只想嚎啕痛哭”譯為I just felt like crying with?abandon，其中with?abandon作“放任”“縱情”解，如：People were shouting and cheering with abandon.? 意即”人們興高采烈,縱情歡呼.”后面的good? cry也是“痛哭一場”的意思
2，“哭老鷹的后代不會變成麻雀吧”意即“因為擔(dān)心老鷹的后代會變成麻雀而哭”譯為because of my fears about the descendants of the eagles turning out to be sparrows.其中my fears about 和I am worried that 都是根據(jù)意思的增益的詞，為了文章的順暢表達(dá)
綜述：本段乃至全文都有許多增益的部分，它們在保證文章流暢和準(zhǔn)確傳達(dá)原文意思中的作用功不可沒，值得注意。
