新托福獨(dú)立寫作：2012年12月01日北美真題及范文 真題再現(xiàn)

Introduction思路拓展破題思路：先描述自己不支持的那一方觀點(diǎn)做鋪墊 轉(zhuǎn)折引出全文論點(diǎn)：鄉(xiāng)村生活更簡(jiǎn)單、淳樸、安全

破題

In regard to this question about life in the countryside or city,some people believe that city dwellers feel more satisfied withtheir comfortable and convenient lives.

中心論點(diǎn)

However, I believe that residents of the countryside often seemhappier and more at peace thanfrantic（緊張慌亂的）and nervouscity dwellers. People in the country tend to live a more satisfyinglife, because countryside residents often have a simpler, purer,and safer life.

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思路拓展 本段論點(diǎn)：鄉(xiāng)村生活讓人遠(yuǎn)離城市的喧囂→煩惱→ 舉例

例子展開：聯(lián)想到pollution→從現(xiàn)象拓展到影響

本段論點(diǎn)

First, living far removed from the turmoil(混亂) andfrustrationsof a major city certainly is benefit of life in the country.

舉例

Crime is usually a rare occurrence in the countryside, and the loudnoises, overcrowded roads and traffic jams which are common inmajor urban centers cannot be found in rural areas.

例子展開

The pollution in urban areas is severe due to vehicles, factories,and other elements, whereas the air in the countryside is muchcleaner than that in the city due to the absence of these pollutants.

結(jié)論

The availability of green space as well as fresh air is beneficial toone’s health because people living in the midst of(在…中間) nature feel a greater sense of ease and relaxation and are lesslikely to catch many diseases.

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下結(jié)論的時(shí)候，需解釋原因，邏輯方才完整。

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思路拓展 本段論點(diǎn)：鄉(xiāng)村居民之間相處更融洽→ 解釋本段論點(diǎn)→舉例→一句話概括好處→結(jié)論

本段論點(diǎn)

People living in the country also experience a greater sense ofcommunity and enjoy more comfortable social networks.

解釋論點(diǎn)

While urban people sometimes do not know the name of theperson next door, rural people share many aspects of their lives.

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解釋論點(diǎn)

采用對(duì)比寫作手法展開，更為生動(dòng)。

舉例一

They may share some of the vegetables or fruits they plant or gettogether and chat with each other after a day of work.

舉例二

They also participate in local events such as sporting events andweddings or funerals of the neighbors.

一句話概括好處

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Most importantly, people there have deeper feelings for oneanother and help each other in emergencies.

結(jié)論

In a smaller countryside town, residents tend to know one anotherwell and provide help for each other. This provides everyone witha good sense of community

Conclusion

思路拓展結(jié)論：鄉(xiāng)村居民的生活更安詳、舒適

結(jié)論

While most city dwellers would never give up the stressfulexcitement of their own life, I believe people in rural areas aremore satisfied with their relaxed and simple lifestyle because offriendly neighbors and the quiet and safe environment.