2012年12月22日四級真題與文都韓蘇老師作文模版對比(來源文都教育)

2012年12月22日,在世界本應(yīng)該“末日”之后的第一天,九百多萬中國的年輕人,在這寒冷冬天的清晨,邁進了四、六級考場,開始了他們對于“末日”的又一場“戰(zhàn)爭”!

然而這場戰(zhàn)爭,并不那么容易取得勝利,很多人在看到作文題目的那一瞬間,他們的心都停止了,都粉碎了——只因為,曾幾何時,他們過于相信某些人類的相關(guān)“押題”,導(dǎo)致的是自己根本沒有實際的動腦并且動手去寫上些作文,去掌握些句子,去運用寫段落!

我在考前的最后提高公開課程中,明確說過,不要“押題”,押不中失常,押上了,但是沒背,只能崩潰!我也說過,希望大家明白“任你幾路來,我只一路去”的寫作王道,即不論出題人怎么變化,我們都只寫自己的作文,讓他琢磨去吧。我們也要注意今年的作文題目,在此,筆者使用自己之前在網(wǎng)上已經(jīng)公布的作文模版來實際書寫一下這次四級作文的題目,以驗證我所說的寫作“王道”。

在對比過程之中,紅色為現(xiàn)場添加,藍色為主題或圖片內(nèi)容,黑色為原有內(nèi)容。寫作一步一定項審題:

有的同學(xué)一看到這個題目,就開始忍不住要問候一些與自己,與考試都不想干的人類,個人認為這完全沒有必要!

我曾經(jīng)在課上講過,15秒鐘必須進入動筆寫作的狀態(tài),否則時間上來不及!那么在審題之后,我們得到了一下幾個信息:
第一,沒有中文的說明,故我們想怎么寫就怎么寫。
第二,有圖片,要加上描述圖片的“廢話”。
第三,圖片中有單詞,有數(shù)據(jù),嘿嘿,字數(shù)要是不夠,這下有著落了……

于是開始寫:第一段:引入現(xiàn)象
因為這是圖片題,所以先上句“應(yīng)景”的廢話“As we can see from the picture that”,其余的部分直接往上寫我們的模版“nowadays, the phenomenon of …… has aroused wide concern among the people who care about the young people's future”記得要把原來的“……”換成關(guān)鍵詞“Education Pays”,要不就跑題了!剩下的隨便寫寫,湊足字數(shù)就好了。

第一段可以寫成:

As we can see from the picture that nowadays, the phenomenon of Education Pays has aroused wide concern among the people who care about the young people's future. Especially to the young generation living in the big cities, they tend to put the pays to the first place but not the degree, ignoring the fact that this behavior may pose underlying threat to their present career and may even endanger futures.

第二段可以有兩種寫法,即第一種,說明這個“Education Pays”的原因,我給大家了四個原因?qū)懮弦粋€就行。第一種寫成:現(xiàn)象原因。

Ample reasons can account for the issue of Education Pays,the following one might be the most critical .For the majority of young people, they have been always considering the education as a bothering thing to do or not a opportunity that can add color to the dull routine of every day life.So,they want to get a job as early as possible.But, as matter of fact, as the picture described, the people who have learned more earn more than others? And,in the picture, the ones who have the doctoral degree earn more XXXX than the ones who have only a degree as bachelor.

在這個段落中,最后一句話,我著重引用了一下圖片的數(shù)據(jù),比較了一下,沒寫倍數(shù),那東西一不留神就寫錯,不寫!

第二段也還可以寫成:現(xiàn)象討論,即大家對這個事兒看法不一致。有的人覺得這個事兒對什么好,有的人覺得這個事兒對什么壞!寫上就好,因為,無論什么事兒,大家的觀點都不是一致的哦!第二段第二種如下:

Does anyone maintain the same attitude towards this issue?Definitely not,as a matter of? fact,opinions vary from person to person. Some argue that Education Pays is beneficial to doctors, because, by this way,they can earn mare money. However ,quite a few people hold the opposite opinion that Education Pays is detrimental to the ones who learn the skills? through hard works.But,most of people agree that the demerits of less education far outweigh its merits

以上連個段落,大家根據(jù)自己的想法寫上一個就好了,可別都寫,真的寫不下的!

第三段,其實萬古不變,就是個人觀點,觀點最好是建議或者對策,照著之前給出的三個,隨便寫寫好了:

To my way of thinking, the issue mentioned above will bound to generate more consequences if we keep turning a blind eye and deaf ear to it. We should appeal to the relevant administration departments to strengthen supervision over it.And,it is high time that all of us ,parents,educators,and the authorities, make combined efforts to tell the young people the fact about the Education Pays. With this measure taken, it is reasonable for us to believe that this problem can be perfectly solved in the near future.

?呵呵,于是,作文就寫完了。

?第二段為原因的字數(shù)為:267(有點多……)、

?第二段為討論的字數(shù)為:241(還是的……)

?一定要注意我多次強調(diào)的主題詞,要在三個段落都重復(fù)的哦!