2012年12月四六級寫作備考指導(dǎo)（名師公開課回顧）

2012-12-10 14:09

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小兜老師，滬江網(wǎng)校最有魄力的四六級老師，除主講四六級詞匯和沖刺備考課程，現(xiàn)也同時教授雅思詞匯課程。瘋狂喜歡看電影，名副其實(shí)的“movie buff”，講課大氣而有條理，性格灑脫幽默，深受學(xué)員喜愛。點(diǎn)擊關(guān)注小兜老師滬江部落>>

課堂提要：

Part 1:?

Part 2:?

一、四六級評卷標(biāo)準(zhǔn)

評分原則：整體評分法。閱卷的老師對一篇作文就總的印象給出相應(yīng)的分?jǐn)?shù)。一般閱卷的標(biāo)準(zhǔn)是分成不同的檔次的，每個檔次都有相應(yīng)的標(biāo)準(zhǔn)卷，作為和大家的作文進(jìn)行比照的對象，然后通過對實(shí)際手上這篇作文的評價，參照標(biāo)準(zhǔn)給出分?jǐn)?shù)。

四級：注意內(nèi)容的全面性

六級：除了上面的內(nèi)容還要注意語言的準(zhǔn)確性、內(nèi)容恰當(dāng)，能夠表達(dá)出自己的思想 ?

優(yōu)秀段落：切題；表達(dá)清楚、文字通順連貫。有個別小錯誤，但不影響閱讀和理解

Nowadays, tuition and fees for college are much higher than ever before. How to finance your college education has become a matter of concern for many. You can deal with it in many ways. For example, you can get all of the money from your parents, or get the money completely by yourself. In addition, you can ask your parents to provide most part of the fees and earn the rest in your spare time by doing part time job. ?

基本切題。有些地方表達(dá)不夠清晰，文字勉強(qiáng)連貫。語言錯誤較多且比較明顯

After I came into the college, there is a question how I my college education

There are many way to solve the tuition and fees of college education. The most usual way is use the family’s money. If his family situation is not well he can apply for loan to bank. Other way is find a job through school’s help. ?

二、英語四六級作文中主要出現(xiàn)的問題

1. 滔滔不絕

2. 啞口無言

3. 英語表達(dá)不地道

表達(dá)不地道舉例：

I choose the way is to combine getting money from parents and working

I no have time

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特別是俗語，不能自創(chuàng)中式翻譯

people mountain people sea

There are no feasts in the world which do not break up at last

Gold den, silver den, no like own dog den

龍生龍，鳳生鳳

There is a large crowd of people

All good things come to an end

East and west, home is the best

like father, like son?

4. 基本語法知識欠缺，句子錯誤明顯?

5. 表達(dá)貧乏-詞匯和句式

think+觀點(diǎn)看法

I believe, some people hold that/ It is generally accepted…..As for me(對于我來說，至于我)

因果關(guān)系-because, due to, owing to

cause- lead to, result in, bring about

6. 文章結(jié)構(gòu)、層次有問題

如何寫出漂亮的文章詞-句-段-篇章

詞匯：注意準(zhǔn)確的選擇和使用

show/reveal/demonstrate/point out/illuminate/denote/?

Examination is a common headache to students all over the world. They all detest is, but all being domineered by it?

Examination is a common headache to students all over the world. They all dislike it, but all being ruled by it . ?

注意詞性變化

benefit/process、finance

一詞多義drill/employ

He doesn’t know how to employ his energy and time.

轉(zhuǎn)折詞/轉(zhuǎn)折短語：遞進(jìn)：moreover, furthermore, what’s more Most important of all, science has transformed the lives of millions of people. Worst of all, it might corrupt a child’s mind

強(qiáng)調(diào)： indeed, In fact, no doubt

As a matter of fact, people have to face up to all kinds of pressures in a society marked by competition.

The internet under the guidance of the law, of course, will play a better role in the future.

句子：句式多樣化-This is / That is/ I am..

What they fear was that the political challenges of sustaining support for global economic integration will be more difficult in the United States.

Everybody has got some good qualities or others which can be recognized.

強(qiáng)調(diào)：It is +強(qiáng)調(diào)部分+ that/who +從句

It is the communication thatour parents need most.

Our parents need communication most

提醒一：句式一定要自己動腦子去記一下，動手寫一下，才能記得牢，會使用。

提醒二：長句使用得看場合。不要為了寫長句而寫長句，長短句的有效配比是目標(biāo)，使用過程中一定要注意場合和必要性。

段落：?一篇好的文章，開頭段、展開段和結(jié)尾段。

開頭：簡明扼要的介紹文章主題；

展開：以事實(shí)為根據(jù)來說明、解釋并擴(kuò)充主題；

結(jié)尾：重述主題、得出結(jié)論或者提出建議等?

每個段落的句子使用要有序、銜接緊走，過度自然，長短結(jié)合。一般來講，一個完整的自然段落常見的結(jié)構(gòu)“主題句+擴(kuò)展句+結(jié)尾句”

With the development of Internet, it has influenced our society to a large extent, especially interpersonal communication. Internet enables people to break though the limitations of distance, strengthening social network. And it helps people engage with their parents, friends at any time, without suffering the long and painful wait for a reply. Whereas, there are also disadvantages that the internet brings to us. More and more people complained that they have lost face-to-face communicating skills. As a result, people become more and more indifferent to each other in real life.

篇章：

P1：提出問題/現(xiàn)象-舉例

四級第一段：

Nowadays the phenomena of excessive packaging of goods are prevailing in our society: clothes placed in cardboard box and wrapped in well-designed plastic bags, imported bottles of wine packed in wooden boxes and fruits put in finely-decorated baskets.

六級第一段：注意不要太多的描述

As is described in the picture, a father asks her daughter how her school today goes on. Instead of answering directly, the daughter tells her father to read her blog. It is common that youngsters nowadays incline to communicate with others on internet increasingly, and lack communication with people around them

P2：對問題進(jìn)行具體分析：主題句+擴(kuò)展句+結(jié)尾句

六級：

Internet enables people to break though the limitations of distance, strengthening social network. And it helps people engage with their parents, friends at any time, without suffering the long and painful wait for a reply. Whereas, there are also disadvantages that the internet brings to us. More and more people complained that they have lost face-to-face communicating skills.

P3：總結(jié)(your opinion/conclusion)

In conclusion/ From my point of view/To sum up/In summary

部分諺語正確表達(dá)：

Put the cart before the horse ?本末倒置

A good beginning is half the battle ?好的開頭是成功的一半

Facts speak louder than words ?事實(shí)勝于雄辯

More haste, less speed ?欲速則不達(dá)

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