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Teacher's Day

14 points 漂漂亮亮型

Teaching is the most glorious and respectable career. On Teacher’s Day, I'd like to express my innermost appreciation and gratefulness to all the teachers in the world!

Teachers are the elevators of human souls. I still remember how my teachers pulled me through a critical moment. I did a bad job in the first preparation test for the college entrance examination and I was considerably depressed. Then my teachers came to my rescue! Patiently, my English teacher analysed the paper word by word and encouraged me to carry on. My Chemistry teacher also gave me a precious gift. He told me not to be obsessed with the test results and encouraged me to find fun in learning. Their help enabled me to survive the competition and will surely benefit me in the future.

Perhaps I'll never have a chance to repay all that I have received from my teachers. But I'll try to be a useful person and become their pride.

11 points 清清楚楚型

Teacher's Day is coming. On this occasion, I want to deliver my genuine gratitude to all the teachers.

I will never forget my class teacher's devotion and care to me. Before National Entrance Examinations, I was so nervous that I couldn't focus on the books. I wasn't confident about my ability. The idea of giving up even occurred to me. My teacher noticed my anxiety. Then she encouraged me and advised me a lot. She told me how she overcame the obstacles of life when she was faced up with important affairs.

Her words touched me a lot. And I began to face the exam with full courage and confidence. Luckily I achieved my exams successfully. I know it’s the result of my teacher's love and care.

I will cherish the words of her through my life. I will try to face the difficulties in my life without hesitation. That's the best way toreturn her love.

8 points 馬馬虎虎型

Today is teacher's day. I want to give best wishes to my teachers, who assist me to learn and who shape the world to me.

I remember it was in 2001, I would have the chemistry olimpic competition for high school students. As the only one girl in my class, I didn't have confidence to compete with my boy classmates. Mr. Wang who was my classmaster always encouraged me: “remember girls can do all things what boys can do.” Besides, he helped me with my studies. Even during the winter vacation we could do some interesting small experiments at Mr. Wang's home. What he made us known are not only some difficult questions but also the core for science, the love for science and the courage to think and to ask questions. In berief, Mr. Wang made us enjoy scince rather than work just to win the game.

Today I am studying in university. I'll always remember what Mr. Wang taughter us, I will work hard on my studies and remind myself to work for the benefit of humans.

5 points 稀里糊涂型

Today is Teacher's Day. Happy Teacher's Day, my teachers.

In the evening, all of my classmates and I make a party for our teachers. In the party, each of us give prerents to teachers and hope them feeling happy and heathy. Then, teachers and us play together. All of us feel very happy.

I also remember when I was in my midschool, my English teacher help me to study English. At that time, my English is very very poor. Although I studied it day and night, it seemed worthier and worthier. Then my English teacher told me that the way I studying is worry. He told me the right way and help me friendly everyday. With his help, my English became better and better.

Teachers are also friends for us. I think I must study hard to repay my teacher.

2 points 一塌糊涂型

Teacher's Day. Happy Day. I hope teachers feel luck. I believe it is time we elevated the teache to the space where it belongs, thereby setting an example to the people to the teacher's attitude.

Remember, when I was a young boy, I am a outrageous boy, In the classroom, I have been observed to throw something across the court without conside such a move might have angry someone in their seat. Therefor, my teacher Mr. Li always smailed to me. She offen talk to me. You like athletic,like jodan. I feel happy. She tall me when class is over, don't do it in class. We can play together when our class is over.

Not so just, I sometimes throw something at someone, yet. But, I can remmber my theacher's words. Don't do it!

Is there enough helps to help secure me futute? I certainly thisnk so. Thanks, Teacher.

Theacher, you may soon see and possibly feel difference in your reaction I am going to a teache to help some students like me. Actually, I will become student's good freinds.?

2、考生在寫作中常見困境及應對策略

滔滔不絕“意識流” ??無話可說真難受 ?真情流露沒必要

英語表達憋得慌 ? ??處于被動要包裝 ?字數(shù)不夠時間緊　

3、四六考試考場作文典型錯誤剖析

縱觀近年來的閱卷情況，學生的作文主要有以下幾個方面的問題：

第一、英語語法結(jié)構(gòu)知識欠缺，語句問題嚴重。

第二、積極詞匯量太小，且對已學詞匯記憶不清，用詞貧乏。

第三、表達思想不清楚，漢化現(xiàn)象嚴重。

案例1：（中文直接漢化，影響意思的表達）

1. Teacher's Day Happy!

2. That's in junior, My first love had been false. （用詞不當）It made （用詞貧乏） me a low emotion so that my study bring down （漢化）quickly. Until that day, my headmaster talked with me many many things. （漢化）She told me: The false is the mother of success. What can I do for the society in the future and how to meet the love and so forth. （漢化導致意思表達混亂）

案例2 （常見的連續(xù)漢化問題，逗號一路貫穿）

3. Last month, I was ill, had to live I hospital, my mother worried my class was delaied, because there was an exam in resently.

4. Now I had grown up, a senior student, after 3 years I will leave university for communication and society, I hope I will become a teacher like my teacher, take my love to every student, live on their spirit.

案例 3（漢化中式諺語或名言，令人啼笑皆非）

5. “one day as teacher, my parents all life.”

6. candles are burnt out while your tears are dried.

7. The teacher likes the cow, eat grass, squeeze the milk.

8. Teachers like the people who watered the flowers in the park. They teach us, need no back.

案例 4 （思想膚淺，表達混亂）

9. No teacher, no today's me.

10 .You said me, you are not a easy to die person.

11.Teachers like wax.

12. The teacher like my mother.

13. You are day to night to work for us with many much study.

案例 5 （用詞不當，貽笑大方）

14. If you have questions, you can come to the restroom to ask me.

My English teacher often take me to restroom to talk.

休息室居然寫成了洗手間！

15. He touch my body softly.

I want your body health.

I want you.

…touched me day and night.

Touch詞義的混淆，造成令人捧腹的笑話！

Want 錯誤的表達成“祝愿”

16. Let's marry our teachers.

All teachers marry together.

是marry or merry, 讓人費解！

17. The teacher studied him carefully in the classroom and took the afternoon to study him instead of eating anything.

Study 一詞不知何意？

案例 6 詞匯詞性混淆，造成結(jié)構(gòu)錯誤

17. I instead of all of classes to congratulation to you happy Teacher's Day.

這里引述的例句與考生通篇作文的寫作水平是一致的，其中5、6分的例句具有典型性，代表了近乎中等水平考生的寫作水平。從這些例句中不難看出，中等水平的考生，事實上也包括中上等水平的考生，在寫作上存在的主要問題是表達思想不清楚。

表達思想不清楚的主要原因是考生作文中嚴重漢化的英語，即中式英語，比如： "man can live happiness"， "Man is iron, and food is steel.", ＂Women are half side sky.＂。此外，語言錯誤的普遍性和嚴重性十分驚人，比如，主謂不一致，名詞單復數(shù)不分，動詞時態(tài)語態(tài)濫用，常用詞拼寫錯誤比比皆是。這些嚴重地影響了思想的表達?？荚噷嵺`表明，多數(shù)考生在寫作上的主要欠缺不是系統(tǒng)的寫作理論和方法，而是最基本的單句寫作能力。

文章無論長短，都是由句子組成的，句子是表達思想的最基本的單位。因此，句子是否能寫得正確、達意和清楚，將直接影響整篇文章的寫作質(zhì)量。