【滬江網(wǎng)校版】2011年12月英語六級作文范文——滬江外教版
The Way to Success?First essay—stream of thought type
No one has the exclusive way to success.? Some say money. Some say love.? Others say a house, a car, a child, a degree from a top university—but all are of these are only outward ways to show others that we’re successful.? People think that they must have these things before they can be happy, but Scott Achor in “The Happiness Advantage” says that the opposite is true.? Achor, who is a professor at Harvard University and who has been teaching the “Happiness Course” for fifteen years, recently wrote this book to show that happiness breeds success, not the other way around.? When I read it, it struck a chord with me and I realized that truly positive, happy people always seem to love what they do and who they are with.? Even if times get tough, they don’t knuckle under. They persevere and overcome all obstacles.
To me, the way to success is to figure out what you truly believe in and love in life.? You should write up a mission statement about how you can contribute to the world by doing what is meaningful to you.? Then, you should go after your dream—no matter what it is or if it fits society’s version of a successful reality.? Set goals, divide them into specific tasks, learn what you need to learn, do what you need to do and always keep the prize in mind.? The way to success is to have a clear vision of your future and know what will make you happy.? If you are doing what you love, with people that you care about, and making a meaningful contribution to the world, you will not only be happy, but you will be successful.
解析：
這是一篇議論文。結(jié)構(gòu)非常清晰，首先由Achor教授提出的success與happiness之間的關系，暗示了自己對于成功的解讀。第二段，告訴讀者the way to success的具體幾個步驟：Set goals, divide them into specific tasks, learn what you need to learn, do what you need to do and always keep the prize in mind. 與中式思維產(chǎn)出的英語文章相比，此文行文流暢深刻，說理充分，很有背誦的必要。但唯一的不足之處就是，字數(shù)超過了考題要求⊙﹏⊙b。
本文亮點：
1. exclusive way to success
2. happiness breeds success, not the other way around
3. it struck a chord with me
4. knuckle under
it fits society’s version of a successful reality
外教介紹：
Cindy Savage has more than 35 years of experience as a teacher, principal and administrator of schools in the U.S., South America and China. In addition, she’s a writing expert with 40+ published novels for young people and 100+textbooks to her credit. Her specialty is training students to write and speak with clarity, enthusiasm and style. She’s taught workshops worldwide, has published hundreds of articles on the subject, including a regular column for the Shanghai Student Post.
Cindy老師是《上海學生英文報》專欄作者，從事教育事業(yè)已有35年，在中國、美國和南美地區(qū)的許多學校擔任過校長，擅長寫作和口語教學，出版過40余部青年小說，撰寫過近百部教科書，同時在多種期刊雜志上發(fā)表過相關文章。?
