【滬江網(wǎng)校版】2011年12月英語六級作文范文——高分版
The Way to Success First essay—stream of thought type
The Way to Success
"Genius is one percent inspiration and ninety-nine percent perspiration." And here comes our question, what is the way to success?
A strong will and great efforts are the most essential two keys to the door of success.
Why do people fail to achieve their goal? The reason is that most of them give up halfway due to their lack of a strong will once they encounter any difficulty. A man of a strong will always sticks to his cause no matter how tough it might be.
Would Thomas Edison be such a great man in history if he had done nothing but possessing a strong will? We are all familiar with his story that he had tried one thousand kinds of materials before he finally made his great bulb light up. Without hard effort, Edison might have been a nobody. Without efforts, no one can succeed.
To sum up, a strong will and great efforts can help one open up the way to success. Where there is a will with efforts, there is a way.
【作文解析】
本次六級考試作文題為The way to success,與本次四級考試作文Nothing succeeds without a strong will遙相呼應,大同小異,都是在討論成功這一話題。
此次六級考試作文的話題依然是老生常談,即通往成功的道路,相信很多考生對此并不陌生,背過范文的同學寫起來肯定也是得心應手。
該范文段落結(jié)構清晰,闡釋說理也足以讓人信服,是一篇不錯的作文。
開篇作者通過引用愛迪生關于天才的一句名言來引出問題,吸引讀者注意,引起讀者的思考。緊隨其后,作者就開門見山地亮出了自己的觀點:只有堅強的意志和不懈的努力才能打開成功的大門。
第二段,作者同樣以一個問題來引領全段,引發(fā)思考。然后通過對比不成功和最終成功的人的不同表現(xiàn),來闡釋堅強的意志對獲得成功的重要作用。
第三段,作者進一步闡釋“僅有堅強的意志,沒有實在的努力,也能成功嗎?”同樣是先發(fā)問,然后舉了愛迪生的事例,來證明答案是否定的。舉名人的例子,而非個人的實例來作為文章的論據(jù)才更有說服力,這也是這篇作文的高明之處。
最后一段,作者先以第一句話進行了總結(jié),然后為了加強作文結(jié)尾的力度,作者還對名言“Where there is a will, there is way”進行了改編,換成了自己的觀點,為我所用,這也是本篇范文的一個兩點之處。注意,寫作文時對名言進行恰當?shù)馗木帲粌H能體現(xiàn)幽默創(chuàng)新的一面,同樣也體現(xiàn)了作者不錯的文字駕馭技巧,考官也是很歡迎這樣的文章的。
提醒:滬江四六級將考后放出2011年12月英語六級答案