不連貫（incoherence）

不連貫是指一個(gè)句子前言不搭后語(yǔ)，或者是結(jié)構(gòu)上不暢通，這也是考生經(jīng)常犯的錯(cuò)誤之一。如：

1. The fresh water, it is the most important things in the world.

分析：

“the fresh water”與逗號(hào)后的it不連貫，it與things在數(shù)方面不一致。

改為：The fresh water is the most important thing in the world.

綜合性語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤（comprehensive misusage）

所謂綜合性語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤是指在雅思寫(xiě)作中除了上述10種錯(cuò)誤外的諸如時(shí)態(tài)，語(yǔ)態(tài)，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)，大小寫(xiě)等錯(cuò)誤。如：

1. Today money to everyone is very importance, our’s cloths, live, eat, go etc.

分析：

“our”是人稱代詞的所有格形式，可以單獨(dú)作形容詞使用，沒(méi)必要使用’s形式，而且后面應(yīng)該跟名詞。

改為：Today money to everyone is very important, for example, our eating, clothing, living, going ,etc.

了解了上述常見(jiàn)錯(cuò)誤后，朗閣海外考試研究中心就帶大家通過(guò)幾篇考生的雅思范文，來(lái)深入了解這些錯(cuò)誤發(fā)生的頻率和改進(jìn)這些錯(cuò)誤后會(huì)給文章帶來(lái)的質(zhì)的改變：

例一：

Writing task 1 (Cambridge 1- page 51):

The diagram shows the process of collecting information on the weather in order to produce reliable forecasts in Australia Bureau of Meteorology. It can be clearly seen that information goes through three main stages until it can be broadcast. These stages are incoming information, analysis and forecasting, preparing the broadcast and finally, broadcast.

As it is shown in the diagram, first, information is gathered via satellite, radar, and drifting buoy. The information from satellite is transmitted to radar. Satellite, itself, takes photos. All the information provided by these three tools are integrated into satellite photos, radar screen, and synoptic charts. Then, they are analyzed and forecast. This information is sent to computers in order to prepare the broadcast. Finally, up-to-date information is broadcast via TV, radio, and recorded announcement.

In conclusion, the diagram shows that there are various stages in preparing and

broadcast of latest news on the weather and that radar has a fundamental role in gathering data. Also, the most comprehensive information is obtained from synoptic charts.

例二：

Writing task 2

Smoking tobacco should be made illegal like other dangerous drugs. Agree or disagree?

In the world today where stresses and tensions are at high degree, some people appeal to smoke cigarettes. They think that by means of cigar they can relax themselves, while it is obviously shown how harmful tobacco smoking is and it is clear why it should be banned in public. Smoking, at a glance, has many noxious effects on body. Some harmful aspects are proved and shown on body, on economy, and on the air.

Taking body into account, tobacco smoking has so many hazardous effects. W.H.O reports that 85 per cent of lung cancers are caused by cigarette smoking .On the other hand, recent research studies show that low birth weight is more common among the children of smoker mothers. Another effect of tobacco on the body is its risk for heart diseases. Smoking is the major cause of heart attacks. These examples simply show the perils of tobacco smoking to the body.

Furthermore, cigarette trading these days has become a lucrative business around the world, especially within developed countries. This subject leads to extraction of millions of dollars from developing countries in order to import cigars. This currency that is spent on smoking perilous substances, can be specified for education, health, and infrastructures. In addition, smoking affects the economy of families. The money that can be used for promotion of life is used for decreasing life span.

From the air point of view, smoking cigarettes has dramatic effects on air. In rapidly increasing air pollution of metropolitan areas, smoking makes the situation even worse. Scientists report that one of the major pollutants in big cities is cigarette smoke. Furthermore, every day we see a lot of fags on the streets or in the nature that make their scenes indecent.

No wonder, tobacco smoking is risky from several points of view and making it illegal may help to decline its adverse effects. People should find better ways to relax themselves, like exercise or reading.