【雅思大作文】寫(xiě)作的低分原因
讓步段是一種實(shí)用性很強(qiáng)的寫(xiě)作段落,對(duì)話(huà)題的支持會(huì)起到非常好的效果。根據(jù)多年的教學(xué)經(jīng)驗(yàn)和實(shí)踐,筆者發(fā)現(xiàn)讓步段非常適用于五段式的雅思大作文里。本文中,專(zhuān)家將就讓步段的主要寫(xiě)法作一個(gè)系統(tǒng)的小結(jié):
一、 五段式中用于第三個(gè)主體段
在五段式的大作文中,三個(gè)主體段一般都是以“單邊”的方式,“一邊倒”的支持某一個(gè)觀(guān)點(diǎn)。而若將最后一個(gè)主體段寫(xiě)成讓步段,不僅可以照顧到反方的論點(diǎn),而且更有利于進(jìn)一步支持和強(qiáng)化本段的觀(guān)點(diǎn),從而起到強(qiáng)化論述的效果:
Obviously, not every celebrity is generous. Some, I am sure, keep all their money for themselves. But there are people like Bill Gates who are well known for making donations, attending charitable functions and taking part in a range of activities that support people less fortunate than themselves.
在寫(xiě)讓步段的時(shí)候,我們必須要使用表“轉(zhuǎn)折”的連詞,常用的有but, however, nevertheless, nonetheless等。有時(shí)候我們還可以使用讓步狀語(yǔ)從句來(lái)引導(dǎo)讓步段,涉及的連詞有:despite, in spite of, although, though, even though, even if等。在上面這個(gè)例子中,我們看到作者用了2個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單句來(lái)描寫(xiě)反面的觀(guān)點(diǎn),對(duì)于用來(lái)描寫(xiě)反面觀(guān)點(diǎn)的句子,建議一般以1—3句話(huà)為宜,而轉(zhuǎn)折后的句子,通常在長(zhǎng)度上要超過(guò)前面的句子。下面我們?cè)賮?lái)看一個(gè)讓步段:
題目:Very few school children learn about the value of money and how to look after it, yet this is a critical life skill that should be taught as part of the school curriculum. Do you agree with this statement?
It is possibly true that schools could try to make children understand the importance of all these areas, but children are young and cannot look into the future or predict the skills that they will need.
上面這個(gè)讓步段非常簡(jiǎn)潔,請(qǐng)注意作者使用的句型:“It is possibly true that.……”,這是我們?cè)谧尣蕉卫锝?jīng)常用來(lái)開(kāi)頭的句型。下面我們?cè)賮?lái)看看如何用讓步狀語(yǔ)從句引導(dǎo)讓步段:
Although watching TV or playing computer games do enrich children‘s spare time and broaden their horizon to some extent, a sedentary lifestyle reduces healthy outdoor activities and will have long-term medical consequences for children. An increasing number of children suffer from obesity and near-sightedness as a result of spending too much time in front of a flashing screen.
在這個(gè)段落中,作者使用了讓步狀語(yǔ)從句,在繼續(xù)論述“久坐”的生活方式對(duì)孩子健康方面的弊端前,先說(shuō)了一下它的優(yōu)點(diǎn),進(jìn)而反駁,從而起到了鮮明的對(duì)比反差效果,突出了這種生活方式對(duì)孩子健康造成的巨大傷害。