iBT新托福30分滿分作文賞析

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很多新托福考試的考友總是在感嘆，這個(gè)世界上能拿到的好作文實(shí)在是太少了，其實(shí)很多時(shí)候不是這些作文少，而是很多考友沒(méi)有努力去發(fā)掘這些作文。這不是太傻論壇就有考友分享了自己的滿分作文。無(wú)老師第一時(shí)間轉(zhuǎn)過(guò)來(lái)，推薦給各位考友！

拿這些滿分作文都該做些什么呢？

1 看整篇結(jié)構(gòu)，要看一看這些作文的結(jié)構(gòu)是怎么展開(kāi)的。要仔細(xì)的讀一下，這些作文每一段的寫(xiě)作目的，到底是支持還是反對(duì)，以及哪幾段支持，哪幾段反對(duì)。

2 看段落結(jié)構(gòu)，要仔細(xì)分析在一段之中，每一句話所起到的作用。到底是主題句，還是例證。

3 看句型多樣性，要仔細(xì)想想這些作文每一句話說(shuō)話的分寸。

4 比對(duì)自己的寫(xiě)法?？疵恳痪湓挼臅r(shí)候，腦中都要思考，這句話中文是什么意思，如果是我自己來(lái)寫(xiě)，我會(huì)怎么寫(xiě)！并且在下一篇自己的作文中替換為這些用法。

5 用詞多樣性和準(zhǔn)確性。

6 如果有需要的話，再背一下是最好的了，沒(méi)有輸入就沒(méi)有輸出嗎！

比如：In this case, computer as a representative of modern technology plays a negative role in learning information.?

這句話，我們自己很有可能寫(xiě)的就是，In this case, computer that is a equipment?of modern technology have a bad effect??in learning information.?

這里的差距就很十分明顯了！因此，當(dāng)給你美的東西，還要有一雙發(fā)現(xiàn)美的眼睛！

2011-8-2

Independent Writing：Does modern technology help students learn more information and learn it more quickly?

Marvelous as it looks at first sight, modern technology does not help students learn information at a greater speed and with higher efficiency in most cases; or it could work towards the opposite direction which led students to lose their initiative to learn and explore.

First of all, one property of modern technology is latently harmful to any learning mind – it distracts. One thing we feel about when we are searching for information online is that the internet, as an outstanding example of modern technology and even regarded as the innovator of education, provides us with not only relevant results to make use of, but also external links to click. More than once I turned on my computer to check school library for resources, but ended up watching Youtube videos. In this case, computer as a representative of modern technology plays a negative role in learning information. We do acquire more information with the convenient tool, yet most of them are irrelevant and in the end procrastinating would lower our learning.

Also, students would easily become disoriented in the huge sea of information. Although modern technology could equip us with easy access to information, the huge amount of resources would actually leave us discombobulated. Therefore, it is only we possess information more quickly rather than we learn it more quickly. An illustrating example is my experience with a HK digital library which stores almost all the books I desire. At first I enjoyed downloading them from the database, however, one month later I ended up with hundreds of books stored in my hardware yet none of them finished or ever clicked.

Furthermore, modern technology gives students an illusion that information and real knowledge is easy to learn – just by clicking mouse or watching videos. But in fact this forms only the first step towards useful information and effective learning, as learning of any kind requires full concentration and interactive thinking, which are almost absent in the pocess of popular e-learning experience.

To summarize, modern technology does not help students learn more information and learn it more quickly, though it does make access to information and resources much more easily. The popular e-learning still lacks the concentration, depth, and interaction that are the hallmark of traditional ways of educating and learning.

2011-8-10

TPO Independent writing：我們生活的時(shí)代比父輩們年輕時(shí)生活的時(shí)代更好還是更壞？

It seems that people always have a desire to compare: am I prettier than others? Are we living in a better age? Or, as the question goes, is our life easier and more enjoyable than it was several decades ago? I would say no, as I have witnessed the struggle and paradox of our generation.

First of all, we are now living in an age of revolution with no previous human experience that could be referred to. Living in such a fast-changing world would not be easy and comfortable at all; with everything keeps changing, everyone has to move fast in order to catch up with the majority. However, people were much more stable and care-free when our grandparents were children; they did not have to learn a second language in order to get a better job, or read a lot in order to get informed. Yet in our age, these are supposed to be the responsibility of young people.

Another discomfort of our age is that we are experiencing interpersonal alienation. With the development of communication technology, people in fact become alienated with friends and relatives since they could be so easily accessed via phone or email. Too often we feel that few of our friends are true friends, without the traditional feeling of mutual affection which could only be created by longtime apart. But several decades ago, people treasured their friends and maintained relatively close interpersonal relations, which is much more enjoyable than the estrangements we are experiencing.

The last factor that has made our age so uncomfortable is the abusive use of technology. Although it brings much convenience, it essentially changes human – we are no longer the master of tools, but instead the slaves of devices. We rush to metro station in order to catch an early train, sit in front of radioactive computers all day long in order to get our work done, and stay in air-conditioned rooms all summer without experiencing the natural changes outside thick cement walls. Several decades ago, people could still live closer to nature and make rational use of modern technology, which to me is the essence of human living experience.

However, the comparison between different times is itself ridiculous. The criteria could not be easily determined, and opinions are highly personal. Anyway, we have a longer life span, more advanced medical facilities, and easier traffic than our grandparent when they were children, and we should treasure the present experience. Imagination of the past might only be nostalgia – if I ask my grandparents the same question, they might as well say that our life is much better than the past generations. Who knows? As long as the world is still peaceful, life at any time would not become too difficult to handle.

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